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My imas poems
Scotty:
As long as you understood what I was trying to get across Blake. Just describing a character does not a poem make.
RoninatorMarx:
--- Quote from: blake steel on January 28, 2010, 04:16:58 pm ---I don't mind suggestions. As long as no one is bashing the way I do my poetry. I know my im@s poems could be better and that I have made a few mistakes in some of the characters poems. I just thought it would be alright if I made character poems describing what they were like, I never thought of using their image songs for the poems before.
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There's nothing wrong with describing a character for the contents of a poem. lol (Heck, some famous sonnets from the time were all about describing one person/place/etc.) ^^
Cien Laguoire:
Of course, but it's all in the matter on how that description is done. Blake was doing doing it rather bluntly, so to speak.
blake307:
My next two poems are different from the other one I usually write. I actually put more thought into these poems this time. Enjoy.
Lollipop, the word which comes in mind,
especially when the cuteness of Yayoi, Iori and the Futami twins are combined.
Whether they are together or apart,
No one can deny the purity and passion in their hearts.
With their combined talent and sweetness,
they are as amazing and glamorous as the moonlight priestess.
Though the three of them are different in their own special way,
the kawaiiness similarity they illustrate on stage is as clear as day.
When people observe this loveable loli trio
they can't help but cheer for then in harmony as they are the real deal.
When combined together as one,
there is nothing this astonishing and kawaii loli trio can't get done.
Sitting in the dark hole,
I hide from my fears like a ground mole.
I'm in realization that my uselessness isn't the way,
So I face forward headstrong on this magnificent day.
As I take several steps on my first stage,
My fans cheer for me in praise.
Like the Cosmos in the nocturnal sky
I am shining on as my idol dreams launch sky high.
When my best friend Makoto-chan is beside me,
It’s like I am standing on the beautiful blossoms under a cherry tree.
I am Yukiho Hagiwara.
With my friends by my side,
There is no doubt I will thrive.
Cien Laguoire:
Not too bad. Certainly an improvement over your older poems. :)
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