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digi162:
--- Quote from: Cien Laguoire on January 28, 2010, 03:51:13 am ---No offense, if any was caused.
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I don't think there's anything to be offended about really, both you and Scotty are offering critique IMO. I think it'd be worst to praise someone for their works when in reality you're not interested in what they've put together.
RoninatorMarx:
--- Quote from: Scotty on January 28, 2010, 02:03:08 am ---There is no problem. You're just not thinking correctly.
By tone, I mean the author should set the emotion of the poem itself to match that of the idol. Also, you should look up the word autobiography, I don't think you know what it really means.
I'll give you a quick example.
Let's take Yayoi. She's cute, hyper, and energetic. Because of this, the author should make a poem that matches her personality. Set a bright and cheerful tone, full of quick fire descriptions and whatnot.
This works for any idol. But keep in mind that this is something I only suggested. Blake can keep doing what he's doing.
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I understood that it was a suggestion and what it holds. >.> I just stated why it might NOT be a good idea. Elaborating:
Out-of-character routine: Kinda self-explanatory. But when I mentioned this, I never said who'd be under it. It could be done by Blake, as he was describing the character, but then he accidentally takes the role of a new character, not necessarily of the idol being described.
Of course it could instead lead to Blake unconsciously making a mistake in character interpretation, seeing as he might not become aware of he is doing so and could get both his way of expressing and the feel of the idol/s mixed up (also can justify the autobiography part. I mean, describing oneself in one point of life is still a part of that person's autobiography, no?).
--- Quote from: Cien Laguoire on January 28, 2010, 03:51:13 am ---Also, just to add, your poems lack a traditional structure. It looks like you're describing the character, rather than reciting a poem with your current structure.
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That is a common misconception, Cien. In this modern world, people mistook the definition of "poetry" with "lyrical poetry" (or so I believe, seeing their forms are nearly the same) whereas most cliche forms fall under. Blake's poems are of the free verse type, which holds little to no musical pattern. Something I believe to be forgotten and buried under as the modern world progressed.
Oh and since it's free verse, I believe my message of just reading them with some passion (as mentioned earlier) is still the best way to read them.
Scotty:
A reader shouldn't have to approach any sort of literature with a set emotion or 'passion'. The author has to bring this out of the reader using his written art.
Stop defending and let the critique flow. It's best for Blake.
RoninatorMarx:
--- Quote from: Scotty on January 28, 2010, 05:58:01 am ---A reader shouldn't have to approach any sort of literature with a set emotion or 'passion'. The author has to bring this out of the reader using his written art.
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That's........where I got the reading with passion thing with Blake's poems. >.>
What I said was nothing more than my outcome, my recommendation for everyone else who might not get it.
blake307:
I don't mind suggestions. As long as no one is bashing the way I do my poetry. I know my im@s poems could be better and that I have made a few mistakes in some of the characters poems. I just thought it would be alright if I made character poems describing what they were like, I never thought of using their image songs for the poems before.
Thanks for the suggestions Scotty and Cien. Maybe for their first person view i'll use the names of their image songs in it.
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