Grace's Translyrics Thread

[Amazing_Grace]

Inspired by Virgo's. Her lyrics are really good.

Well. I'm still a noob at this, but I've gathered up a good amount now (five finished ones) so I'm gonna start posting them for review. And by "start", I mean, "I'm going to show you all of them right now."

Feedback is appreciated! Especially on some songs. I'll keep my notes up so you can see where I think I need help. Even if I don't have a note at a certain spot but you think you have an idea, let me know!

Word of warning, I tend to be a bit literal with these things, but not REALLY literal. Like, I want it to mean the same thing, but I'll fix things if need be. And most of the time it rhymes. YAY~
Another word of warning...none of these are iDOLM@STER so far. .-.
If that is a problem, please, by all means, move this thread to General Chatter. That is totally fine.

Let's get started then, in the order I finished these in. Starting with Luka Megurine's "The Tailor Shop at Enbizaka"!
Fun Fact: I'm only the second person ever to have posted translyrics of this song on the internet.

~*~

On Enbizaka there sits a little tailor store
Owned by a young woman whom many do adore
Her skills are unmatched and her attitude is good
She is the talk of the whole neighborhood

The most worrysome thing on her mind as of late
Is the unfaithfulness of her beloved mate
“Even though I adore that man with all my soul,
“For whatever reason, he just won't come home...”

But that musn't bother me; I have to keep on working
Holding my scissors just tightly enough
They were handed down to me by my dear late mother
The more you sharpen them, the better they cut.

The neighborhood is very peaceful right now
This is such a serene and pleasant little town
I spotted my loved one standing at main street
He was with a woman; exactly who is she?

Her red kimono is a pretty little thing
The loving way he looks at her is so sickening
Even though I love him, he still spends time with her
I can't stand stand the sight, so I return to my work

But that musn't bother me; I have to keep on working
Holding my scissors in one hand tightly
Tears pouring down my face, I slowly get to sewing
The deep red kimono sitting in front of me

Today the people are quite strange and on-edge
Seems that a crime was recently committed
My beloved was sitting down by the bridge
With another woman; exactly who is this?

I would have consoled him if that girl weren't there
He seemed quite content with that girl with pretty hair
That green sash she wears is perfect, don't you agree?
Is this the type of girl with whom you want to be?

But that musn't bother me; I have to keep on working
Holding my scissors in one hand tightly
Though my eyes are red and swollen from all of my crying
I get to work on the sash in front of me

Today the whole neighborhood is very upset
Seems another crime was recently committed
Outside the hairpin shop, I found my dear man
The girl that stood beside him was holding his hand

I watched him buy her an ornate yellow hairpin
Surely her being so young must be a sin
What on earth was going through your shameless mind?
You have no decency, isn't that right?

But that musn't bother me; I have to keep on working
Holding my scissors in one hand tightly
On my mother's scissors, a strange hue is now showing
Despite this, I'll work hard at my work again today

I have finally finished work
And if you will still not return
You have left me no choice; there is something I must do
I just have to go out, and go to see you

A blood-red kimono
A green sash that I wear
An elegant yellow hairpin, I'll put it in my hair
I've become the type of woman that you love
Well, what do you think of me? Aren't I pretty?

Today the whole neighborhood is in quite a stir
It seems that this time a man was murdered
He was in a family, four of them in all
All of them were slaughtered, isn't that dreadful!

Enough of that, the way he spoke was so cruel
“Hello, nice to meet you,” does he think I'm a fool?
It was like he spoke to someone he never knew...
It was like he spoke to someone he never knew!

But that musn't bother me; I have to keep on working
Holding my scissors just tightly enough
My beloved scissors are now dyed crimson red
The more you sharpen them, the better they cut

[Amazing_Grace]

I really meant it when I said I was showing you guys all of these at once.

Anyways! Next up is "Twilight Night" from the Vocaloid "Night" series. I intend to do "Bad End Night" and "Crazy Night" too one day. They're still in the works, though.

This one was really hard and much less literal than TSaE. But in the end, I'm decently satisfied. They're singable, at least. I think.
Feedback is appreciated even though I don't think I have notes on this one! There are places I'm a little "meh" on, especially the bridge and the last chorus.

~*~

How will I ever get home?
Wandering all on my own
'Til the plaudits ceases I will never be set free...

A girl who's lost, all alone
Finds herself at someone's home
Villager: “Hello? Is anyone out there?”
Saying come and get me
Open your door
“Anybody there inside?”

Butler: “Are you out there on your own?”
The night is getting cold.”
Maid: “Enter, let me serve you~! We'll have tea in the dining room!”
Doll Twins: "Welcome!! Let's sing!! And, have a crazy ♡ Join us!!"

Mistress: “It's getting darker out here!”
Lady: “It's getting dangerous, dear.”
Master: “Indeed...so until the morning comes...”
All: “We will sing, we will dance, let us welcome you inside!”

Butler: “Let's hurry, hurry along...”
Maid: “Preparing shouldn't take long~!”
Doll Twins: “OK!! Short rehearsal, so we'll party freely with dance and song!”

Make sure the set is standing
Costumes and the makeup ready
Every little detail going just as we have planned!
Hand over your glass, my dear
Let us give a toast, my dear
And we will begin!

Tonight there can't be but one mistake, throw all your cares away!
We'll sing and dance, no single footstep made in error!
This level of perfection makes the crazy night go on!
Don't you worry, don't you worry, just let it in!
“So fantastic!” “I need more!” “Give me some!” “GIVE ME MORE!”
“I'm so excited!” “Let the praise go on and on and on!”
Are you ready for a show that never, ever, ever ends? Let the plaudits reverberate within your very soul!

Feast's over, everyone leaves
Day comes after we all sleep
Maid: “Oh no! Where could she be?”
Doll Boy: “That girl we catered to...”
Doll Girl: “Ran away?”
All: “Gone?! She's gone, she's gone, she's gone!”

Lady: “Say, are you listening now?”
Master: “What a peculiar sound...”
Butler: “But where, where on earth could it be originating from?”

Doll Twins: "Wake up!! Let's think!! And, to the nines ♡ Join us!!"
Maid: “Oh my! What's happening here~?”
Butler: "The next PagE..." Doll Twins: "Isn't THERE!"
Lady: “Well well, who has taken it?”
Doll Twins: “Isn't good?! Isn't GOOD!! Ahahahahahahaha!!!!”
Master: “Without our libretto...”
Mistress: “We can't continue our show!”
Doll Twins: “OK!! Every, everyone, we'll search for the page until we die!!”

But who on earth has stolen it?
Why on earth they've stolen it...
Who stole the future page, so stopping us from moving on?
Every single one of us...every single one of  us!
So suspicious!

Tonight, the play is advancing, but the clock's not advancing
Time is moving along, but there's no sign that we have moved at all
Are they for passing time? Or maybe for passing on...?
In all this confusion, are you even the real “you”?
The future page has been missing, and our head's gears are turning
The True End's not emerging, so there must be something that we lack!
If we can't figure out just what it is we cannot find, We'll just keep on thinking 'til the morning rolls around!

Butler: “Ah...the future page that has been gone...”
Villager: “With this sharpened hand within the clock, I...”
Maid: “Where oh where on earth can it be found?”
Villager: “Is is really meant for killing time, or...?”
Doll Boy: "Hurry hurry!!"
Villager: “To the secrets down below...”
Master: "That way? This way?"
Villager: “Moving towards the sound's source...”
Doll Girl: “Hey, look here, look at this!”
Villager: “All these things that I don't know...”
Doll Twins: “It's a letter, shady letter, would you look at that!”
Lady: “That is the letter that young girl had!”
Villager: “Do I have to use these hands...?”
Mistress: “What's it inside the note?”
Villager: “Is this really how it ends?”
Doll Twins: “Open, careful!”
Villager: “Does my answer lie inside...?”
All: “It's a blank sheet of paper of the perfect size!”

Villager: "...Found it!"

And as the time moves along, and the show will go on, ignore the echo of sanity and let the crazy hour flow!
Don't think at all about the hour or the “right way”! With such perfection the Crazy End goes on!
“So fantastic!” “I need more!” “Give me some!” “GIVE ME MORE!”
“I'm so excited!” Let this perfect night become my own!
Our hearts are pounding as the curtain rises on the play
The final act is starting, are you ready for the End?

Villager: “Please stop the scene, no, can't you see? Time is really not advancing properly!
The next page has not been found, the future is uncertain, for the white sheet, that blank sheet, is the Bad End!”
The clock is still moving, and the show is still going, and the Endroll is finally in sight! However...
The cast, and the play, and the audience is left behind; the sheet we found is dyed with a “Bad End” after all...
No words, no stage directions, there's nothing at all!
Ah, what a pity, it seems we're out of time!
So this here is where we end~!

: "'Till the next night!"

[Amazing_Grace]

Third set!

"Last Revolver" by Gumi Megpoid. Why yes, I DO write a lot of Vocaloid translyrics. In fact, out of all these five, four are from Vocaloid. XD

Anyway. I LOVE this song. It's so sad.
I decided to try my hand at writing lyrics for it.
They're a bit off, but I do like them. And I've actually sung them myself (A Capella with my mediocre microphone) so I know they're singable. But feedback is still appreciated.

~*~

Loaded revolver is what I got
What a creative present Santa-san has brought.
I know what it's for, I know...it's time to say goodbye to you...
Farewell, my dear...the end is coming soon...

If I could turn it all around
Then the summer festival that arrives in town
Is where I'd want to be...us together, only you and me
I'm sorry, for what I will do
This decision is going to break my heart...
Now I can see it clearly
From the start, my dear, we were just too many worlds apart

Standing underneath the cherry tree
That is the place where you met the “evil” me
You were on the side of good, a man who served to keep the peace
And nonetheless, I fell in love with you...

This won't be the first time I shoot
But it will my first time shooting someone like you
I know I'll cry so hard...my whole world is falling apart...
I'm sorry, this is all my fault
And you know that well, so don't you dare smile at me!
Please, dear, don't make this harder...just forget about me now...

Spring was the season we met and I fell for you
All the best memories, summer we made them true
One autumn night I delivered myself to you
This winter evening I'll finally be rid of you

As my finger rests on the trigger, I am shaking
I cannot believe that it's all really ending...
I'm sorry, I'm sorry, that's all I can say to you...
All you could say to me...

If I could turn it all around
Then the summer festival that arrives in town
Is where I'd want to be...us together, only you and me
Don't worry, please don't worry, love
We will always be together, this much I'm sure of
That's what we always said...I believe our love can see us through beyond the end.

[Amazing_Grace]

I really was serious, all five at once. XD

Next up is "A Tale of Six Trillion Years and One Night" by IA.
This one is LADEN with notes! I just can't seem to come up with stuff that flows well, rhymes, is singable, and isn't a rip-off from the thousands of other people who've done this already (I just wanted to try it because I love this song).

So please, feedback is especially welcome for this one. XD

~*~

In a village far that had no name
Lived a boy, a boy, of unknown fame
No one knew, no, no one knew
This fairy tale of his

It has been this way since I was born
Treated as some sort of demon spawn
No one cared, no, no one cared
That I had been punished (this line up for change)

There's one thing I scarcely know:
“There's no reason to be sad.”
But before I could object
To the sunset I was dragged (this pre-chorus up for change)

I don't know, I don't know, there're many things I don't know
Like a kind word, a soft word, a warmth to melt the snow
I don't know of “no pain”
Or the warmth after the rain
But I'm honestly, honestly, honestly, honestly, freezing and afraid

I can't die, I can't die, won't you hurry and let me die?
In this life that I'm living, not a dream takes to the sky
So this grand fairy tale
That is hardly even there
Will be sucked up and swallowed and tossed to the sunset and nobody will care (both choruses somewhat up for change)

What a life I lead of violence and shame
Such a sad existence, not even a name...
I couldn't even notice you
As you reached out your hand

We can't speak, we can't, and you know that
“What's your name?” That is the thing you asked
I'm sorry, I can't answer you
I don't even have a tongue

There's no place that I belong
There's no place for me, and yet...
“I am going home with you.”
And away I am dragged (up for change)

I don't know, I don't know, there is not one thing that I know
I don't know if you are or aren't a child anymore
But the warmth of your hand
And these feelings that I have
They are honestly, honestly, honestly, realer than all I've ever had (this line up for change)

You won't stop, you can't stop, why is it that you won't stop?
I think you know just what will happen if you're ever caught
Will the rain ever cease?
Will you choose to stay with me?
We'll be sucked up and swallowed and tossed to the sunset and that's OK with me (up for change)

As the sun vanishes within the ground
Dawn is breaking and we run around
If only life could be this way all the time...
If the world were just swallowed up and we were alone...
The world should be swallowed up and leave us alone...

I don't know, I don't know, but I think I hear a voice
Not the sound of your breathing, just a loud and painful noise...
With no chance to escape
Just like that, I'm dragged away
And we're sucked up and swallowed and tossed to the sunset for yet another day

I don't know, I don't know, I just do not understand
Not how our tale will end, or the name of my only friend
I don't know how I'll heal
Or if this is even real
But I'm honestly, honestly, honestly honestly, speaking what I feel (last three lines up for change)

I don't know, I don't know, but the ringing in my ears...
Has been sucked up and swallowed and into the sunset, it vanished in the air

[Amazing_Grace]

Last one, and my personal favorite!

"Ichiban no Takaramono", the Yui version. Holy crap, no words can explain my love for this song. It's so GORGEOUS.
And so, I wrote translyrics.

I actually really like these. I think they capture the emotion of the song, but they still fit, and they rhyme, and they're singable. I know because I've sung them. XD
Hnnng this song though~ <3 <3 <3

But still. If you do see something that should be changed, tell me. I really want these to be great. Because I'm going to post a cover with them the second I get Audacity and a better microphone.

~*~

When I see your face, we just fight
But you know, that's OK with me
I know even that is a beautiful memory

You are the one who taught me I don't need to be afraid, not anymore
And although I am impaired a bit
I know I can still grasp happiness
That is why...

Even though I may be lonely
And this burden's hard to carry
I will still continue going
With this dream of ours within my hand

I am glad we were together
I am glad it's just the two of us
But when I wake up this morning
I'll be face-to-face with emptiness

If us two could play forever
That would make me more than happy
But deep inside, I know all that is is what I believe

I don't regret the fact that I was born, no, I don't regret it anymore
Like the end of summer festivals
Though it's lonely, we must carry on
Carry on...

I'll go anywhere I have to
I will make this dream here come true
I will show you that I can take happiness and make it all my own

And although we're separated
Even though you may be far away
I'll be reborn with the morning
And you'll find me in a new "today"

Even though I may be lonely
Even if I feel like dying
I can still hear your voice calling
Telling me that I should not give in

Though this burden's hard to carry
And this loneliness is killing me
Even if I feel like crying
I can feel the warmth within my heart

Going round and round, and swirling
Time is eternally changing
I cannot remember anything
And you know, that is OK with me

If I close my eyes and listen
I can hear a voice that's laughing
Somehow, now, within this nightmare
It's the treasure most precious to me

[Amazing_Grace]

[spoiler]HAHAHA no one cares why am I bothering[/spoiler]

Know this is old, but i whipped up some more Vocaloid to be reviewed.
This topic would probably be more popular if more people were Vocaloid nerds like me.

Anyhow, this one is BlackJack. I love this song, but the lyrics are a little risque if you read into them. I tried to capture the vague seductiveness of the song while still portraying the male character being sung about in the way he should--a real playa.

Enjoy. [spoiler]lol just kidding no one is reading this[/spoiler]

~*~*~*~

I'll stop in just a little, baby--“one more time!”
I'm sick of it, it's thrown away, “one more time!”
But hey, can you let me try it “one more time?”
Oh, I just want you to be mine~.

The red noise we're hearing is ripping this night apart
Scream, let it echo, baby--“one more time”
Hey, let me see those lips of yours, freezing cold
Maybe you can let out some of your lies

Suddenly, feelings are held up
Superior, worried that you'll stop
Rapturously, you'll let your love light
Alone, make a compromise

Limited, live in contradictions
Blindly, loving compensation
Destroying all that you see... Will you go mad with me?

Hey, right now, just thrust the knife, obey me like a dog tonight
Just before you glare at those you've had, “one more time.”
Ah, all you'll do is spit it up, those twenty-one emotions you've dug up
This song is for those who crawl along

Quietly, I saw how you thought
Obviously, you saw what I want
Orderly, let's not be too lost.
We're all alone tonight~.

Smoothly, I know you'll obey
Insolence, I'll flatter you today
I'll make you lose everything~

Hey, right now, will you take your knife? Like a chased ideal, just cut and slice~.
Don't let your depression mount again...“one more time~.”
Ah, what you've done to your twenty-one realities that have been crushed
A song for those like you who lost to lust~.

[AkuAkane]

As a reply to your thing about this thread being more popular if more people were "vocaloid nerds"; I like Vocaloid well enough, but honestly I haven't found a vocaloid song that I've liked in months. I feel like good vocaloid music just isn't being made anymore and I've found all the songs that would interest me already. My vocaloid playlists on youtube amounted to almost 300 songs before a certain youtube channel got taken down and a huge chunk of the songs I had on my playlists were gone as a result. Also in general, I'm pretty picky about what I listen to. So yeah, I like Vocaloid, but since I haven't found a song that I like in ages I just don't feel the want to discuss it. That's just me personally, though.

[Amazing_Grace]

As a reply to your thing about this thread being more popular if more people were "vocaloid nerds"; I like Vocaloid well enough, but honestly I haven't found a vocaloid song that I've liked in months. I feel like good vocaloid music just isn't being made anymore and I've found all the songs that would interest me already. My vocaloid playlists on youtube amounted to almost 300 songs before a certain youtube channel got taken down and a huge chunk of the songs I had on my playlists were gone as a result. Also in general, I'm pretty picky about what I listen to. So yeah, I like Vocaloid, but since I haven't found a song that I like in ages I just don't feel the want to discuss it. That's just me personally, though.

Oh look who's back guys

Yeah, I see what you mean. I have certain producers that I follow that are always releasing really good songs (Hitoshizuku-P and Yama are the best I've ever found), but a lot of the stuff being released lately has been mostly "meh".

I actually did have a few of these up on a vocaloid-centered forum...
...but then that forum got blocked on my computer and I forgot my password, so that didn't last long.

Well, I'm not picky. I'll keep sharing even if no one reads them, just in case someone does.

[Amazing_Grace]

Well, I wrote a set I'm actually very proud of. I thought I might share it with you guys.

This time, it's Karakuri Pierrot or Puppet Clown, a Vocaloid song. Oh look it still isn't iDOLM@STER stuff haha
I was really inspired by Miku-tan's cover of the piano version and loved it so much I decided to write my own translyrics. I'm very satisfied.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~

Two hours I did wait
But you are running late
I stand here all alone. Is this your answer after all?

The lively passer-by
And the clouds in the sky
They laugh as I cry. I'm such an idiot.

It's such an easy thing to do, and yet it's difficult to do
I can move on from you the second I accept reality
Unable to believe my eyes, determined to believe the lies
Look how I dance around, I look just like a clown, I'm sure that's how you look at me...

Ah, spin around, spin around, I am sick of spinning now
Ah, as my breath, as my breath slowly runs out
Yes, this is it, there's no happy ending for me, is there?
I'm still unable to arrive at where you are

The earth that carries me
Is spinning endlessly
So nonchalantly, it just continues turning

And how I hold my breath
For just a split second
I stand here all alone, dumbfounded and not speaking

It's only a coincidence, and yet it's destiny, it is
I know that I'd be better off if I had not tried to find out
For just a beautiful moment, I felt your warmth upon my skin
That lovely smile of yours, and those kind gestures
I must forget them, or they're bound to break me...

Ah, spin around, spin around, I am sick of spinning now
Ah, spin around, spin around, I am sick of spinning now
Ah, and my breath, and my breath, and my breath is running out
Ah, and my breath, and my breath, and my breath is running out

Ah, things will change, they will change, and the fact that they will change
Ah, just the thought of it all is scaring me
Stop! I am done! I won't wait for you anymore, or I
I'll really end up shattering to pieces

Ah! Spin around, spin around, I'm so sick of spinning now!
Ah! And my breath, and my breath is running out!
Yes, it is true, I am nothing but a clown to you, but
I still desire you to please
Take command of me...

[Amazing_Grace]

Okay so I know it's been forever

But I finished a set of lyrics for the Vocaloid song Abstract Nonsense

And I am so proud of them and I just want to show them off somewhere so

Here, cry over these with me:

~*~*~*~*~*~*~

The crazy theories that are lined up to be noted by all
They go unnoticed and now starting to crumble and fall
My future plans are now nothing but confrontational
An angry fantasy
The more I listen, then the more I hear their secrets on wraps
That girl is no more than a puppet painted in white and black
And where the owner keeps it is within her heart, I know that
A varied symphony

Ah, mark me and label me with any price.
Ah, even my life is clearly stuck in place. I'll round it up.

It's worthless as it is. I want to stop all this. I'll hang my head outside the windowpane.
It's boring as it is. I'm tired of all this. But I'm not brave enough to die today.
It's worthless as it is. I want to stop all this. I'll stick the syringe in my wrist at once.
It's boring as it is. I'm tired of all this. I'll just eat some cake and breathe again until it's done.

The bodies hanging from the wall are swinging in a rhythm.
The number of the bolts in their heads is at a minimum.
My life, a sad existence, is only worth two part-time jobs
A friendship factory
And when I listen in, I hear all of their secret stories
That girl is nothing but a media monkey.
The fallacies they use are nothing but a dustpan, truly
A high-pitched pitch, to me

Ah, come over here. I'll let you be yourself.
Ah, how many people will you kill this way? I'll round it up.

It's worthless as it is. I want to stop all this. I'll press a knife into my chest and die.
It's boring as it is. I'm tired of all this. But I'm not brave enough to take my life.
It's worthless as it is. I want to stop all this. I'll dip my head beneath the ocean waves.
It's boring as it is. I'm tired of all this. I guess I'll take a break to think it through just like I always have.

Ah, if you keep crawling like you're set to die,
ah, you'll never finish all the proofs you tried. I'll round it up.

It's worthless as it is. I want to stop all this. I'll jump into a path and reach the end.
It's boring as it is. I'm tired of all this. I'm too afraid, and so I'll run again.

It's worthless as it is. I want to stop all this. I'll put a loaded gun against my head.
It's boring as it is. I'm tired of all this. But all that I can do is beg for death.

Oh, I just want to cry. I'm so ready to die. There's no one here for me to call a “friend”.
Ah, I'm just a worthless voice. I'm nothing but white noise. You've already shown me I'm nothing but a stupid piece of trash.

Tomorrow it will rain, I promise that.