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Takane Shijou - Lunar ancestry
Sev:
Its a good story.
Cael K.:
I think towards the end of SP, at Rank B or something... that's when all the pressure starts building up. Kuroi likes to isolate his idols, right? I think it went something along those lines, and she may've said that being alone's too much or something.
I turned to Yukiho for this one, she said we should leave her alone, so we did.
Points of constructive criticism, though: I noticed your tenses switched from present to past and back quite often, and they might be better off being all in the past or all in the present (people speaking is another matter, and I personally am partial to past tense). Sometimes you can convey inner thoughts and emotions through body language as well, rather than stating it outright. Also, I think a new paragraph is usually started when speakers change, but I don't know where I got that impression. (Probably heard that a long time ago.)
ikuto-sama:
Don't know if this is a repost, but I randomly found this and thought I should share Takane's funky dance with you guys.
Haldo:
I think somebody used to have that one as their avatar XD
Clear Blue:
--- Quote from: ikuto-sama on February 07, 2011, 04:20:41 am ---
Don't know if this is a repost, but I randomly found this and thought I should share Takane's funky dance with you guys.
--- End quote ---
It's still cute.
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